Write a stronger opening line for my email or message
Gives you several sharper opening lines that get to the point and make the reader keep reading.
The prompt
Write a stronger opening for my email or message.
My draft: [PASTE THE FULL MESSAGE]
Reader: [WHO, and how busy or interested they are]
What I want them to do or understand: [GOAL]
First, tell me in one sentence what my current opening does and why it is weak (e.g. warms up too long, starts with background, buries the ask, opens with an apology or "I hope you're well").
Then give me 5 alternative openings, each one or two sentences, using different approaches:
1. Bottom line first - the conclusion or ask straight away.
2. Reader's benefit - what's in it for them.
3. The key fact - the number, change, or news that matters most, taken from my draft.
4. The question - a direct question they will want to answer.
5. The connection - a link to something they said, asked for, or care about.
For each, note when it works best and the risk (e.g. too blunt for a first contact).
Rules:
- Use only facts in my draft; no invented statistics or hooks.
- No clickbait, false urgency, or flattery.
- Each opening must lead naturally into the rest of my message; tell me if a sentence after it needs adjusting.
Finish with your recommended opening and a matching subject line.
Highlighted [brackets] are blanks to replace with your own details.
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What to fill in
- PASTE THE FULL MESSAGE
- WHO, and how busy or interested they are
- GOAL
How this prompt is built
This prompt follows the Few-Shot structure (Few-shot prompting). A few-shot prompt includes one or more worked examples of the input and the output you want, so the model can copy the pattern instead of guessing it.
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